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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Other thinks that face-to-facec interaction is essential. Discuess both view and give your opinion.

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At
this
 time,
People
 are using the internet and social apps a lot,So they are going to meet some
people
 online maybe in social apps,Online video games,and too many other ways to communicate with
people
 without seeing them face-to-face,
Also
 which might be a good thing or a bad thing in
people
 opinions. A lot of
people
specially
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the
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young
man
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men
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 and women think it's a good way to chat and play with anyone anytime and anywhere in the world just
hope
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on social media
such
 as X,Instagram,Facebook,And other apps that every day we hear about new one,Or maybe you are a gamer so you want to play some online games,You don't have to wait for your real-life friends,Just start the device you playing on and meet amazing gamers who share the same interests like you.
On the other hand
,
There
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there
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 are many
people
 who don't feel comfortable talking or texting online without seeing them in real life face-to-face because there
is
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are
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 a lot of preferences considered when choosing
who
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whom
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 you want to talk to or to spend some time with,some
people
 prefer to talk to someone in their age,In their city,Or even in there country,My father actually one of these
people
 who like to meet in a real place to talk,Not on
app
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the app
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 or something.
However
,In my point of view, I see that WI-FI is a great opportunity to find and meet new friends at
anyplace
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any place
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 in the world without spending too much money on travel,I love
this
 way and I have got many good friends
this
 way,One of them
actully
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actually
 my best friend.
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