Human activities has had a negative effect on ecosystems, animals and plants across the world. some people believe this cannot be changed while others feel that we can still take action to protect living things and the environment. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

a lot of
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our
enviroment negativly
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environment negatively
. people around the world
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diffrent
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different
point
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of
views
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on
wheather
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whether
they are able to reduce the negative impact or
accpet
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accept
the fact of destroying the
envioement
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environment
. some people
belive
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believe
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that they can not save the ecosystem and wildlife from the bad habits
cused
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by humans.
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, the air
pulotion
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pollution
and how
its
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affecting the high
tempretures
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temperatures
rais nowadays. back
then
they
use
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to live without air conditions but today
at
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the same place will be
impossibale
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impossible
to stay
with out
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without
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air
conditnings
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conditioning
conditionings
. many factors
cussing
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the
poulution
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pollution
population
some of them can be
controled
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controlled
or reduced and
other
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others
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not. protecting the
enviroments
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environment
environments
need
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needs
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a massive
effeort
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effort
done
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by all
goverments
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governments
government
and
citizns
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citizens
to save the gift
was
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that was
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gifted to us by God. and
maintan
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maintain
a healthy life on
this
earth. one of the factors that can be stopped
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belleive
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believe
belive
is
anamials
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animals
skin usage in
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fashion
. for
instanc
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instance
, recently many
luxuray
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luxury
high-end brands and
businnes
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business
owners
are
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promoting
animals
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animal
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leather
an
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and
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a
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fancy goods
with
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an expensive prices
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.
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, the
procces
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process
to get these leathers
are
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so harmful
for
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animals
sinsce
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because
they are getting the
skine
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skin
while
the snake, crocodail and ostrish
a
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live and once they have
dobe
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done
the
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let them
diying
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die
.
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an ethical and
shoud
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should
be
illegale
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illegal
thing to be done to
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an innociant
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innociant
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innocent
soul. in my
opinion
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this
must be
sttoped
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stopped
by
seitting
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setting
a strong
legale
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legal
and regulation system by
goverments
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governments
government
to help
savaing
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saving
savaging
our
univers
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universe
.
to sum up
, hearing
the
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enviroment
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environment
is unacceptable and every one of us must take
an
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apply
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action to save and protect the
enviroment
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environment
before
lossing
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losing
it, by collaborating of us hand-by-hand we will make a
diffrence
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difference
.
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Your work would benefit from a revision of spelling and grammatical errors. Simple tools like spellcheck and grammar enhancements can raise the clarity of your text.
coherence cohesion
Structuring your ideas in clear paragraphs can make your argument more effective. Separate your introduction, body points, and conclusion distinctly.
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Provide more expanded and detailed examples for your points. For instance, you could elaborate further on specific environmental policies that have succeeded elsewhere.
coherence cohesion
Linking words and phrases help connect your thoughts. Use them to provide smooth transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
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You have addressed the topic by recognizing both viewpoints on how human activities affect the environment.
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Your writing demonstrates genuine concern about the effects of pollution and the unethical treatment of animals.

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