The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.
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proportion
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exports
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four different countries
such
as Japan ,
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China
, the United States of America and
India
from 1990 to 2012 .
Overall
, both the US and the
China
rates rose at the beginning of the given
period
,
however
, the percentage of the US increased rapidly
at the end
of the
period
whereas
the percentage of Japan declined slowly
year
on
year
until
at
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the end of the
period
. In terms of the
proportion
of
India
went up gradually throughout the given
period
. In 1990 , the
proportion
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China
and
India
started at
same
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level and
then
the
China
rates increased gradually until
in
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the
year
of
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2000 .
Following
this
, there was a rapid
rose
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in the
China
rates with almost 10
percent
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. It is interesting to know that , it shot up at the
starting
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of
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2005 and at
this
time it reached a peak
25
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percent
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.
Then
, the
proportion
of
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exports
levelled off in
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year
period
and
then
, it improved slowly with almost 7
percent
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. By 2010 , it decreased minimally
with
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about 5
percent
.When it comes to the
proportion
of Japan , there was a gradual decline in the
three -
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year
period
. By 2000 , it stabilized
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17
percent
. Another interesting point from the graph was that
,
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it went down slowly
then
levelled off
at the end
of the
period
. In terms of the percentage of
the
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US
exports
, there was a rapid decrease at the
starting
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of the
period
then
, apart from some gradual increase , it decreased steadily
with
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5
percent
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. By 2012 , the
proportion
of
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US
exports
improved
with
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6
percent
.
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  • percentage
  • exports
  • timeline
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  • significant increase/decrease
  • trade relationships
  • economic dependencies
  • stability
  • fluctuation
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  • Country A/B/C/D
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