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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Pie charts: Total world energy consumption and electricity generation, last year

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Pie charts: Total world energy consumption and electricity generation, last year
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The two pie charts represent the total power utilisation and
electricity
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 production in the
last
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 year all around the globe and the materials used for that
overall
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, the main consumption of energy was from oil followed by coal and
Gas
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 ,
whereas
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 for
electricity
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 production Coal was used the most .
Gas
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 , hydro and nuclear sources were used in almost similar proportions with some differences .Another interesting finding is that combustible renewable and waste was not utilised for
electricity
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 production In the entire global energy consumption
gas
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 was used at 34.3% . Usage of coal was at 25.1% which exceeded the usage of
gas
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 by 4% . Combustible renewables and waste were used at 10.6% which was almost 5 times more than that of hydro . Nuclear consumption was at 6.5%
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 other sources were negligible For
electricity
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 generation all around the globe , coal was used the most nearly 40%. almost double that of
gas
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 , which was the second most commonly used . Nuclear and hydro were used in almost similar amounts . oil was utilised for
electricity
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 generation 3 times more than other sources ,which was 2.1%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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