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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopments Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pictures illustrate the current scheme of a university's
sports
centre
,
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 and a renovation plan for
the
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future redevelopments. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the
centre
 building is going to get much bigger.
Also
, more facilities and amenities will be established in the new layout.
Curernty
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Currently
, there are two outdoor
coutrs
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courts
country
 on the west and east parts of the
sports
center
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, which is going to be flattened completely.
While
 the whole structure will be bigger in the future layout, the
centre
 of the building like
changing
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 room, seating, and reception region will remain unaltered.
However
, the gym is going to be expanded.
Instead
 of left outdoor courts, there will be a leisure pool, and for the right outdoor courts, a
sports
 hall will be built. Many new facilities will be structured in the new design. Two dance studios are going to be built
at
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 the eastern part of
this
sport
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centre
.
Also
, there will be two new changing
room
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 on each side of the south end.
Similarly
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 a new cafe and
sports
 shop will
be create
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 close to the main entrance.
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, make sure to use a wider variety of linking words to smoothly transition between points. This will help present information in a more structured manner.
overall
Ensure accurate use of vocabulary and grammar. Pay attention to the correct spelling of words like 'currently,' 'courts,' and 'created.'
task achievement
Include more specific examples from the plans to make your response more detailed. Mention specific changes such as the addition of the sports shop and cafe.
task achievement
You have successfully summarised the main changes in the sports center layout and provided a clear comparison between the current and future structures.
introduction conclusion
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for the comparison, making it clear what the essay will discuss.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • redevelopment
  • layout
  • central entrance
  • main reception
  • outdoor courts
  • indoor facilities
  • leisure pool
  • sports hall
  • dance studios
  • climbing wall
  • expansion
  • facilities
  • café
  • changing rooms
  • sports shop
  • accessibility
  • transition
  • multi-functional
  • comprehensive
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