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The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart presents the
percentage
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 of individuals in a particular country who visited one or more museums across various
age
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groups
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 in the years 2006, 2011, and 2016.
Overall
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, the data illustrates fluctuating
percentages
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 of
museum
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visitors
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 across different
age
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groups
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 over the specified period, with a general trend of decreasing
percentages
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 from 2006 to 2016. Examining the data for 2006, the 45-54
age
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group
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 recorded the highest
percentage
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 of
museum
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visitors
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 at approximately 37%,
whereas
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 the lowest
percentage
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 was observed in the 15-24
age
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group
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, standing at about 25%.
Additionally
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, there was a gradual decrease in
museum
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 visitation
percentages
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 across the
age
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groups
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, with the 65+
group
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 recording the second-lowest
percentage
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 at around 28%. Turning to the data for 2011 and 2016, the 55-64
age
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group
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 saw the highest
percentage
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 of
museum
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visitors
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 at approximately 40% and over 35% respectively. Strikingly, the 15-24
age
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group
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 consistently exhibited the lowest
percentages
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 across both years, with figures of about 20% in 2011 and under 20% in 2016.
Furthermore
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, there were fluctuations in the
percentages
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 of
museum
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visitors
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 for the other
age
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groups
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 over the mentioned years, albeit with an
overall
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 declining trend in
museum
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 visitation
percentages
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 throughout the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, groups, percentages, museum, visitors, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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