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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line diagram shows the percentage of
Australian
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 exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. The
Australian
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goods
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 are exported to four different countries they are Japan, USA, China and India.
Australia
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 started to
export
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 their
goods
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 to Japan at the beginning of 1990 during that time their
export
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 percentage
rate
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 was around 27 after the years started moving forward the
export
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 of
Australian
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goods
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 was reduced to Japan in 2012.
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, the
goods
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 which were exported to the USA decreased after 2000 and now they started to increase their
export
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 with a rise of 2% it was around 7%. China was the only country that imported more
goods
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 from
Australia
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. During the period of 1990, the
export
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rate
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 of
Australia
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 to China was very low. After the 2000 suddenly
export
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rate
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 was boosted now it is one of the countries that imports more
Australian
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goods
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. India still maintains a flow of
goods
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 which were exported from
Australia
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 in the period of 2010 the
export
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rate
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 was boosted and in 2012 it decreased.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, goods, australia, export, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • export
  • trend
  • time period
  • individually
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • notable anomalies
  • influenced
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • steady
  • sharp rise
  • sharp decline
  • stagnation
  • data
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