The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
The provided pie charts demonstrate the online purchases of four different sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, the two largest groups at the start witnessed a decline in sales,
whereas
the remaining
sector
experienced a rise.
Moreover
, the travel
sector
, which was the leading
sector
in 2003, was overtaken by the film/music industry in the following 10 years. The travel
sector
accounted for the greatest proportion of the total market share on the Internet in 2003.
However
, it decreased moderately to 29 per cent in 2013, making it move from the first to the second position.
Likewise
, the clothes
sector
had a medium fall to 16 per cent,
although
it was the second largest market share at the start. Compared with the two largest market shares of online shopping in 2003, the remaining industries, which are books and film/music, rose by roughly 3 and 12 percentage points, respectively.
As a result
, the film/music industry became the highest proportion
at the end
of the period.
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  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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