The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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The provided pie charts demonstrate the online purchases of four different sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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, the two largest groups at the start witnessed a decline in sales,

whereas

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the remaining

sector

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experienced a rise.

Moreover

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, the travel

sector

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, which was the leading

sector

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in 2003, was overtaken by the film/music industry in the following 10 years. The travel

sector

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accounted for the greatest proportion of the total market share on the Internet in 2003.

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, it decreased moderately to 29 per cent in 2013, making it move from the first to the second position.

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, the clothes

sector

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had a medium fall to 16 per cent,

although

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it was the second largest market share at the start. Compared with the two largest market shares of online shopping in 2003, the remaining industries, which are books and film/music, rose by roughly 3 and 12 percentage points, respectively.

As a result

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, the film/music industry became the highest proportion

at the end

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of the period.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Comparative analysis
E-commerce
Retail sectors
Growth rate
Decade
Decline
Trends
Online transactions
Consumer behavior
Market share
Significant increase/decrease
Digital era
Accessibility
User-friendly platform
Market dynamics
Predictive outlook

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The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

In some countries,fast food restaurant and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their products.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Young people learn more about good behaviour from books or films/ movies than they learn from real-life experiences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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