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The bar chart shows the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations in 2010. The pie chart illustrates the number of volunteers doing different types of jobs for that same period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart shows the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations in 2010. The pie chart illustrates the number of volunteers doing different types of jobs for that same period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The bar
chart
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based
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is based
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 on the number of volunteers in New Zealand who helped in sports organizations
given
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during given
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 period
2010
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in 2010
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. The number of volunteers
are
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apply
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doing various types of jobs
for
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at
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 the same time
shows
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is shown
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 in that
chart
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.
In
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overall
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, we can easily observe from the table that, couple and dependent children were the most
while
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 one parent or lone person was the least over the given period. It is
cleared
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 from the
chart
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 that, coaches,
instructor
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instructors
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 or teachers were the maximum
in contrast
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, medical support or others were the minimal in 2011.
According to
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 the table
couple
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couples
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 with no children were 26.9%. In comparison, other households were 12.4,
like wise
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likewise
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 one parent was 10.9% at
this
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 time. It is
cleared
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 from the
pis
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PIS
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chart
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 that,
commite
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committee
commit
 members or administrators were lower 48% than coaches, instructors or teachers but in it above reference or umpire and sooner or timekeepers.
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, one parent or lone person was
least
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all
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in all
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 of the different categories.
However
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, committee
chart
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 members or administrators were above different kinds of activities and household types.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • notable trend
  • actively volunteering
  • early career commitments
  • career stability
  • disposable time
  • community sports activities
  • depicted
  • administration roles
  • demanding nature
  • paperwork and coordination
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