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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
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The bar chart shown depicts the current health
expenditure
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 totals as rates of GDP for several nations within Europe for 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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, in most of the
countries
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 the money invested
on
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in
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 health remained steady during those three years. It is
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 clear that the biggest
expenditure
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 took place in Switzerland
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 the lowest was in Estonia. There were four regions which increased their investment
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 gross domestic products.
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 happened in Denmark, Lithuania, Norway and Slovenia.
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 in Luxembourg and
Netherlands
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 the total rate of GDP diminished. It is interesting to note that France was the only
county
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country
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 which experienced a fluctuation with an increase
of
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expenditure
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 in 2007 followed by a drop in 2012.
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, there was a remarkable disparity between the
whealtiest
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wealthiest
 nations
such
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 as Switzerland and Belgium and the poorest like Estonia.
This
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 is illustrated by an
expenditure
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 above ten
percent
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per cent
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 in the richer countries compared to a figure slightly above two
percent
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per cent
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 in the poorer.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • Percentage increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Fluctuation
  • Economic factors
  • Healthcare priorities
  • Public spending
  • Comparative analysis
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