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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buy them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home

It is universally acknowledged that
house
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a house
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 is one
the
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of the
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 significant
necessity
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necessities
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 in life. In the modern era, people are able to opt
their
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for their
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 houses differently, renting or owning homes. Despite all
benefits
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the benefits
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 of possessing houses, renting
weights
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weighs
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 more than having. The following essay will express
benefits
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the benefits
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 and
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of
this
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 phenomenon.
To begin
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 with the advantages, the first standout reason for renting is the flexibility of changing
mansion
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the mansion
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. There are various types of mansions, considering their distances,
deposit
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deposits
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 and space, which makes renters able to select their accommodation based on their desire and conditions.
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, if citizens change their occupations, it would be convenient to change their renting
home
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 in comparison with owning
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home
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a home
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.
Furthermore
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, governments impose excessive taxes by belonging a flat to locals. It is believed that the most vital reason
of
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this
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 preference is not paying it
due to
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 the fact that in some states, the taxes are extremely higher than the rental fee.
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, in the long run, possessing an accommodation is economically
worth
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. In light of the fact that paying a rental fee has increased the expenditure of family, owning it could assist locals in saving money for
future
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the future
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.
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, in some states in the USA,
American
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Americans
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 dedicate half of their income to a charge which is
high
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a high
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 amount of money.
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, the owners would benefit
form
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from
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the document
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document
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documents
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 of the house in order to ask for
loan
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a loan
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 from the bank.
However
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,
this
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 option is unlikely for the renters
due to
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 the fact that they do not own it.
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, in
Iran
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Iran,
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 one of the necessary requirements of asking for
loan
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a loan
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 is providing a house documentary which
it
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apply
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is simple for owners. In conclusion, accommodation is one of the fundamental
need
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needs
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 and people try to opt
it
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for it
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 based on their comfort.
Although
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 renting
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home
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a home
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 has a plethora of benefits, I believe that owning
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home
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a home
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 makes me comfortable and its advantages weights renting
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home’s
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homes
home
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.

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task achievement
Provide more specific and detailed examples to support your points. This will make your arguments more convincing and your essay richer in content. For instance, instead of general statements, name specific countries or situations where renting or owning is particularly relevant.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your ideas are clearly presented and organized logically. This helps in driving the reader through your essay smoothly. For example, instead of jumping between points, cluster related points together and ensure a smooth transition between paragraphs.
task achievement
The essay includes a clear introduction and a well-defined conclusion, which frames the argument effectively.
task achievement
Your discussion on the flexibility of renting and the economic benefits of owning is insightful and relevant to the topic.
coherence cohesion
You've successfully addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of renting, showing a balanced understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial commitment
  • down payment
  • initial costs
  • allocate resources
  • maintenance costs
  • mobility
  • relocate
  • market fluctuations
  • property value
  • building equity
  • appreciate in value
  • asset
  • personalization
  • restrictions
  • rental increases
  • lease renewal
  • financial instability
  • housing budgets
  • long-term security
  • landlord
  • lease agreement
  • equity
  • substantial
  • property ownership
  • property market
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