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Write a letter to owner say how long you want to rent the apartment explain why your plans have changed tell tge owner about a problem in the apartment

#owner #rent #apartment #plans #tge
Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to kindly request to extend the rental agreement. I would like to extend my lease from six months to one year till October 30th, 2025. Pursuing
part time
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a part-time
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 job as
office
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an office
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 administrator was the main reason to
move
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moved
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 from Victoria to Barrie.
However
,
i
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I
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 got enrolled in
dispatcher
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the dispatcher
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 program which is going to be
accomplished
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completed
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 on 30th October
,
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apply
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 2025. My plans have changed because I would like to stay in
this
 building
due to
neat
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the neat
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 and quiet environment.
Moreover
, Raman, who is living in another room,
he
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apply
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is
friendly
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a friendly
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 and elegant person.
Apart from
this
, my college is just 10 minutes walk from
this
 house.
Although
 it is
beautiful
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a beautiful
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 and nice place for a person to reside, there is one problem that I am facing
while
 residing in
this
 house. The microwave in the kitchen is not working properly. During part
time
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part-time
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 job
along with
studies
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my studies
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,
i
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I
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 find it difficult to cook all
the
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apply
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days
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day
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. Sometimes
i
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I
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 rely on
ready made
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ready-made
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 food that
i
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I
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 can get from grocery stores.
Therefore
, when I have to reheat that food, I find it difficult. I hope you will look into the matter. I am looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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 from you Yours sincerely, Jashan
Submitted by jashanpreetmann1515 on

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task achievement
To achieve a higher score in task achievement, ensure you address all parts of the task equally. Provide more specific details about your plans and how it affects your stay.
coherence cohesion
In order to improve coherence and cohesion, try to use more transitional phrases to better link ideas and paragraphs. This will help your writing flow more smoothly.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, reflecting a suitable writing tone.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph contains a single idea, which aids in the clarity and readability of the text.
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