The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The map below illustrates the town of
Garlsdon
with two possible locations for a new
supermarket
that is
planned for Gralsdon. Map Overview,
Garlsdon
town is surrounded by countryside and an industry. The two possible locations for the
supermarket
, are namely S1 and S2. Possible
supermarket
site 1 is located in the countryside and surrounded by a railway that runs from southwest to northeast and main roads,
also
it is near to the industry.
In addition
, people from Hindon which is only 12km away from
this
supermarket
location, can easily visit it, and their population number is 10000. The second possible place for the
supermarket
is situated in the
center
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Garlsdon
, and the railway passes through it.
Also
, it is next to the housing and the industry, so it is accessible for everyone.
Furthermore
, Bransdon is lies in the southwest of Garlasdon which takes only 16km, and its population 15000.
Additionally
, on the northwest of
Garlsdon
, there is Cransdon which is only 25km far away and has a population number 29000. So these things make
this
location better than the first one.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words garlsdon, supermarket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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