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The table shows a breakdown of the most popular languages taken by native English speakers studying at the UK Centre for the Foreign Language Learning in 2020. Summarise the charts by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows a breakdown of the most popular languages taken by native English speakers studying at the UK Centre for the Foreign Language Learning in 2020. Summarise the charts by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates a breakdown of famous languages taken by native English speakers studying at the UK Centre for
the
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Foreign Language Learning in 2010. The units of measurement were given in percentages.
Overall
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, Mandarin had the highest percentage of
women
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 scholars and Italian had the lowest figure as far as
women
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 learners were concerned.
On
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men
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, a high
number
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 studied Arabic and a low
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did
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 Polish.
However
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, Spanish had an equal percentage for both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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.
Firstly
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, Most
women
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 took
Mandarin
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the Mandarin
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 language
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that
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 is 27% and a low
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of
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3 per cent was witnessed
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 those who were studying Italian. When it came to
men
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, a large
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did
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studied
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 Arabic as a subject and only 3% studied Polish.
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, Spanish had 19% on both
men
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 and
women
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 who studied it.
Women
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 taking Arabic and French were 10 per cent respectively
whereas
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men
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 studying French and Italian were 5 per cent.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breakdown
  • native English speakers
  • UK Centre for Foreign Language Learning
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • most popular
  • significance
  • notable trends
  • reflected in
  • traditional preferences
  • least popular
  • perceived difficulty
  • potential implications
  • geographical proximity
  • cultural ties
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