The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The thesis maps demonstrate
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the changes that have happened in the country of Stokeford from 1930 TO 2010 . it is clear from that map that there are more housing in 2010
According to
what is shown , in the north of the map remove farmland and add
houses
.
also
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, in 2010 the shops were removed and put
instead
shops
houses
, and
street
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a street
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furthermore
we can see the primary school
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bigger In the sou th we
also
can see the farmland
removed
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and
houses
,
in addition
, the garden was removed and
a
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large
houses
in
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2010 . they add a retirement house
To sum up
, we could say that have a lot of changes the biggest is putting more
houses
and removing farmland
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • population
  • transformed
  • bustling
  • road network
  • residential areas
  • industrial sites
  • commercial zones
  • river
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • shopping centers
  • educational facilities
  • healthcare facilities
  • urbanization
  • development
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