The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The thesis maps demonstrate
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the changes that have happened in the country of Stokeford from 1930 TO 2010 . it is clear from that map that there are more housing in 2010
Remove the comma
apply
According to
what is shown , in the north of the map remove farmland and add houses
. also
, in 2010 the shops were removed and put Capitalize word
Also
instead
shops houses
, and street
Correct article usage
a street
furthermore
we can see the primary school get
bigger In the sou
th we Wrong verb form
getting
also
can see the farmland removed
and Verb problem
apply
houses
, in addition
, the garden was removed and a
large Correct article usage
apply
houses
in
2010 . they add a retirement house
Add a missing verb
were in
To sum up
, we could say that have a lot of changes the biggest is putting more houses
and removing farmlandSubmitted by kiwawtytime99 on
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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