The following two pie charts give the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts give the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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two pie charts illustrate data about various popular leisure activities of European adults in 1985 and 1995.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in 1985 nearly a third of
people
were wasting their leisure time mostly by watching
TV
.
However
, in 1995 most
people
also
had chosen to watch
TV
or play computer games. Notably, an almost equal percentage of
people
prefer to watch
TV
in both years. In accordance with the pie chart in 1985
people
mostly preferred to watch
TV
rather than eat out and the percentage of
people
who chose to watch
TV
was 32%,
while
eating out was 23%.
Moreover
, roughly
one fifth
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of
people
wasted their leisure time by talking with friends and
to
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talking with family.
Also
, 6% of
people
did other activities.
Furthermore
, almost
one third
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of adults in 1995 preferred to watch
TV
, and the second most popular activity was playing computer games.
Due to
developing technologies, roughly a quarter chose to play computer games,
while
talking with friends was almost equal.
Also
talking with family and eating out was the same proportion. Whilst, 2% of adults chose other activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie charts
  • Leisure activities
  • European adults
  • Survey results
  • Popularity
  • Comparison
  • Ten-year period
  • Walking
  • Cycling
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Percentage
  • Popularity shift
  • Team sports
  • Solitary activities
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