The pie chart below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001. Summarize the information and compare where relevant
The line graph gives information about
rate
of crimes for Add an article
the rate
ages
groups and the pie chart illustrates 4 types of criminal which are violent ,property ,drug and public order in the UK Change the noun form
age
last
year.
Overall
, the age
of 20 were
the highest criminal Change the verb form
was
figures
Fix the agreement mistake
figure
while
the smallest percentage was public order crime
in the pie chart.
At first glance, we can say that the people who are the age
of between 0-8
had Correct word choice
and 8
smidgen
amount Correct article usage
a smidgen
crimes
because their Change preposition
of crimes
crime
rate were
%0 Change the verb form
was
whereas
the
Change preposition
at the
age
of 12 the criminal ratio has
started Unnecessary verb
apply
increase
with almost 5 thousand people Fix the infinitive
to increase
while
, between 44 and 60 age
groups have followed around 10.000 and 20. 000 crime
rate. When it comes to pie
chart the Correct article usage
the pie
crime
which was violent accounted for %46 of the total crime
, as opposed to the public order crime
had the smallest percentage of crime
people by %9 in
Change preposition
apply
last
year compared to other ratios of crimes which were property and drug respectively %23 and %22 last
year in the UK.Submitted by kickbox191 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
▼