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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development.
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The maps illustrate Islip town centre nowadays and future development plans for
town
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the town
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 centre.
Overall
, there are going to change considerably
on
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around the
counrtyside
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countryside
.
In
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 present, shops are located on
north
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the north
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 side
the
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of the
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 map.
However
,
planned
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the planned
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 construction of
building
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the building
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breaksdown
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breaks down
breakdown
 shops
to
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into
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 four
venue
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venues
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. (Bus station, shopping centre, car park, new housing). Below
to
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the previous shop,
main
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the main
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 road
using
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will changed only for individuals.
In addition
, it is considered to
built
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new
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a new
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 dual carriageway. In spite of
development
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the development
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 of shops and some roads, on the south side of the map, (
external
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the external
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 part of
carriageway
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the carriageway
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)
school
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schools
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 and housing still remain
both
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on both
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of
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apply
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maps without any change. The park will be smaller
size
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in size
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 than nowadays.
Also
, some new householding
are
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is
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 added by
developer
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the developer
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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