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The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 map illustrates Stokeford
town
 in 1930 and 2010.Well, there are a lot of notable
things
 that can be observed.
Overall
,we can see that there are
alot
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a lot
 of
things
have
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that have
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 been removed and other
things
 have been converted. On the one hand, we can observe many
things
 in Stokeford
town
 in 1930.
Forexample
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For example
,we can see that there
are
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a
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apply
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farmland in south east which contain
alot
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a lot
 of cows and beside the
the
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apply
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farmland there
were
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is
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post
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a post
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 office and two shops.
Moreover
,in the
East
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East,
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 there
were
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was
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also
 a
farm land
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farmland
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 but
beside
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 the
north east
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northeast
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farm
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farmland
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land
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land,
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 there was a primary school.In the South East of the
town
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town,
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 there were
larg
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large
house
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houses
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 that contained gardens.
On the other hand
,there
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were alot
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alot
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a lot
 of changes that
happend
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happened
happen
 to Stokeford
town
 in 2010.First of all, the
farm lands
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farmlands
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 in
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the south
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south west
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south-west
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 and
north east
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northeast
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 have been removed.
In addition
,
although
 they removed the shops the
bost
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post
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 office hadn't been removed.
Finally
,the
larg
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large
 house had been converted to
retirement
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a retirement
the retirement
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 home and they removed the gardens.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, things with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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  • town
  • population
  • transformed
  • bustling
  • road network
  • residential areas
  • industrial sites
  • commercial zones
  • river
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • shopping centers
  • educational facilities
  • healthcare facilities
  • urbanization
  • development
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