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The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 map illustrates Stokeford
town
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 in 1930 and 2010.Well, there are a lot of notable
things
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 that can be observed.
Overall
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,we can see that there are
alot
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a lot
 of
things
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have
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 been removed and other
things
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 have been converted. On the one hand, we can observe many
things
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 in Stokeford
town
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 in 1930.
Forexample
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For example
,we can see that there
are
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a
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farmland in south east which contain
alot
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a lot
 of cows and beside the
the
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farmland there
were
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post
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 office and two shops.
Moreover
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,in the
East
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East,
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 there
were
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also
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 a
farm land
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farmland
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 but
beside
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 the
north east
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northeast
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farm
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farmland
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land
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land,
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 there was a primary school.In the South East of the
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town
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town,
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 there were
larg
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large
house
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houses
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 that contained gardens.
On the other hand
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,there
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were alot
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alot
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a lot
 of changes that
happend
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happened
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 to Stokeford
town
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 in 2010.First of all, the
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farmlands
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 in
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the south
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south west
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south-west
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 and
north east
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northeast
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 have been removed.
In addition
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,
although
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 they removed the shops the
bost
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post
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 office hadn't been removed.
Finally
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,the
larg
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large
 house had been converted to
retirement
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a retirement
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 home and they removed the gardens.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, things with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • population
  • transformed
  • bustling
  • road network
  • residential areas
  • industrial sites
  • commercial zones
  • river
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • shopping centers
  • educational facilities
  • healthcare facilities
  • urbanization
  • development
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