You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college giving your accommodation requirements. You should outline what your room and food needs are and also ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want. You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You do NOT need to write your own address.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

letter regarding my residence requirements for next semester. My name is Waris Saroye and I am a student of business management, I will move to the United Kingdom

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the next year. I would like to inform you

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of my needs

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as I need a room which must have a bed, table and a chair

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an almirah. It should be near to the campus.

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, as I have to eat from the campus kitchen , so please note

down

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that I have

alregies

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to peanuts

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I can only eat

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food. Meanwhile, if for some reason you are not able to accomplish my needs please let me know

before hand

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so that we can think

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of the other options like

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access to cooking area where I can prepare my own meals.

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, if

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will be far away from

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help me to find private accommodation if you can. Hopefully, you will consider my request. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Raj

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single idea per paragraph

Ensure each paragraph covers a single main idea to enhance clarity and reading flow.

suitable writing tone

Use a more formal tone to maintain appropriateness for the context of a formal request letter.

complete response

You have identified specific room and food requirements, effectively covering the task prompt.

greeting and closing

Your letter begins with a clear purpose and ends with an appropriate closing, making it easy to follow.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

181 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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