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Write a letter to a sports club. Tell them you are not satisfied with the service and have already let them know about this. Write ▪What exactly wrong with their service ▪What happened after you complained the first time ▪What you want the club to do after your letter

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Dear Sir/Madam, Hope you are doing splendidly! I am writing
this
 letter to show my
disappointments
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disappointment
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 with some of the facilities
club
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the club
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 is providing. I would like to address some issues
such
 as the
bathroom
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bathroom's
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 lack
cleaning
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of cleaning
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. There is always a bad smell which
bothered
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bothers
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 everyone.
Moreover
, there are no lockers in
changing
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the changing
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 area
because
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and because
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 of
this
 I lost my sports kit.
Apart from
this
,
staff
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the staff
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 of the sports facility never listen to
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the player
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player
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players
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similarly
 they never pay attention to our mistakes.
However
, I already
write
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wrote
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it down
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down
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apply
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to the manager many times but no one
care
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cared
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 about
ny
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my
 letter. Unfortunately, I never get any response. Meanwhile, if you receive my letter please pay attention
on
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to
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 these obstacles and solve them with your best efforts.
Otherwise
, I have to leave
this
 place. Hopefully, you will consider my request. Looking forward to
receive
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receiving
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best
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the best
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 services from you. Yours Sincerely, Raj
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logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point or idea to enhance clarity.
complete response
Try to provide more details about what you expect the club to do after receiving the letter, such as specific actions or resolutions.
suitable writing tone
The formal and polite tone of the letter is appropriate and effectively conveys the writer's concerns.
greeting and closing
The letter includes both a greeting and a closing, making it well-rounded and professional.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unsatisfactory
  • maintenance
  • equipment
  • customer service
  • resolve
  • complaint
  • acknowledged
  • immediate action
  • compensation
  • inconvenience
  • disregarded
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