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The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of how many people
working
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 in three separate sectors in
town
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 A and
town
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B
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 in two years (1960, 2010).
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, there was an increase in the figure for workers working in the services
sector
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 in both
town
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 A and
town
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B
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,
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 the opposite trend was seen in the manufacturing
sector
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.
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, the percentage of people working in the manufacturing
sector
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 was the highest throughout the period. The proportion of people in the producing
sector
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 in
town
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 A and
town
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B
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 declined from 41% to 20%, from 20% to 53% respectively. The figure for the services
sector
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 in
town
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 A was at 29% followed by a subsequent three-fold increase to 64%. A similar change, but to a lesser extent, was seen in
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B
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, which
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 10% to 25%
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 of the examined period. 30% of workers were working in the sales
sector
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 in
town
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 A in 1960, with a two-fold decrease to 16%. The figure in
town
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B
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 started at 20%,
afterwhich
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after which
 it experienced a slow increase to 22% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, b, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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