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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh dis advantage.

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It is an irrefutable fact that
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the production of
plastic
products
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exponential
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an exponential
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 surge in
current
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 period of time. Some believe that
this
trend
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 positive, others reject
this
 notion.
However
, in my opinion,
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 of
this
trend
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outweigh the advantages.
This
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trend
 by taking examples in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, there are several
advantage
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 of
plastic
 containers. The principle merit is it
reduce
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 the cost of
final
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 product. To explain,
plastic
 is cheaper in comparison to metal,
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 of that, companies can save
lot
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 of money in the packing of any
Products
,
as a result
, less price and more
sale
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.
Furthermore
,
campanies
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companies
 can start
plastic
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 container production business with less investment, and get more profit ,
due to
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the high
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 demand
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this
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of
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products
.
For example
, Ramesh Rand who belongs to
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the middle
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middle class
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 family, started
this
 business only with 50,000 rupees but now he is the owner of 15 branches and
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 as
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 business man of India.
On the other hand
, there are some demerits associated with
this
trend
. First and foremost is pollution in
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. To explain, companies
used
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 many
chemical
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chemicals
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 for the production of
plastic
 which generate harmful gases,
due
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 to that the pollution level increased day by day in many countries.
Moreover
, people who are eating food from these containers are facing health
issue
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issues
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 like cancer.
According to
the
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one
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research
of
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Canadian
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the Canadian
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university
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 of British Columbia,
high
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 use of
plastic
products
 is the main reason behind
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 rate of cancer patients.
To conclude
,
although
number
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a number
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 of companies
getting
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 benefits from these items
but
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the negative
impact
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impacts
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 of
this
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dangrous
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dangerous
 for human heath. So, I believe the cons outweigh the pros clearly.
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You could present counter-arguments to show a balanced analysis before concluding why you believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
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relevant specific examples
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The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of plastic containers, which shows a balanced view of the topic.

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