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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh dis advantage.

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It is an irrefutable fact that
,
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the production of
plastic
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products
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get
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exponential
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an exponential
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 surge in
current
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the current
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 period of time. Some believe that
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trend
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in
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 positive, others reject
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 notion.
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, in my opinion,
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of
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trend
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for
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outweigh the advantages.
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 essay will analyze the pros and cons of
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trend
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 by taking examples in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, there are several
advantage
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 of
plastic
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 containers. The principle merit is it
reduce
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 the cost of
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 product. To explain,
plastic
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 is cheaper in comparison to metal,
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and because
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 of that, companies can save
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a lot
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 of money in the packing of any
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,
as a result
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, less price and more
sale
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sales
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.
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,
campanies
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companies
 can start
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plastic
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a plastic
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 container production business with less investment, and get more profit ,
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high
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the high
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 demand
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this
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of
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products
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, Ramesh Rand who belongs to
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the middle
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middle class
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 family, started
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 business only with 50,000 rupees but now he is the owner of 15 branches and
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 as
successful
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a successful
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 business man of India.
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, there are some demerits associated with
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. First and foremost is pollution in
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the environment
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. To explain, companies
used
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 many
chemical
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chemicals
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 for the production of
plastic
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 which generate harmful gases,
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due
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and due
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 to that the pollution level increased day by day in many countries.
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, people who are eating food from these containers are facing health
issue
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issues
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 like cancer.
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the
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one
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research
of
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Canadian
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the Canadian
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university
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 of British Columbia,
high
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the high
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 use of
plastic
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products
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 is the main reason behind
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 rate of cancer patients.
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,
although
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number
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a number
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 of companies
getting
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get
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 benefits from these items
but
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apply
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the negative
impact
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impacts
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 of
this
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 usage are more
dangrous
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dangerous
 for human heath. So, I believe the cons outweigh the pros clearly.

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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, make sure that the sentences within a paragraph flow smoothly from one to the next. You can achieve this by using more linking words and phrases to improve the natural progression of your ideas.
task achievement
In order to strengthen your task achievement score, ensure that each argument is fully developed and supported with more detailed examples and explanations. This will help in presenting a more comprehensive response to the question.
task achievement
For clearer and more comprehensive ideas, pay attention to sentence structure and grammar. This will help in making your arguments more understandable and impactful.
task achievement
You could present counter-arguments to show a balanced analysis before concluding why you believe the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing the argument effectively.
relevant specific examples
The examples provided are relevant and help to illustrate the main points discussed in the essay.
complete response
The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of plastic containers, which shows a balanced view of the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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