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You fail your monthly KPI and need to report your work performance. Write an email to your manager: Saying why you fail your KPI in this month Explaining your achievements and your failure Stating your solutions how to hit your KPI next month Try to write a minimum of 50 words

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Dear Mr.Jones I hope
this
 message finds you well. I am writing to discuss my performance for
this
 month and to address the reasons behind not meeting my KPI target
Firstly
, there are some reasons that lead to my failure of KPI target: Lose focus: I have had some personal issues so i was not concentrate to the project and worked under my expected; Technical Difficulties: I experienced significant technical issues with a strange case of bug , which caused disruptions in my workflow
Secondly
, here is what i have done: I completed 50% of UI, and i received positive feedbacks from clients; I had a meeting with client and cleared some conflicts from the plan
However
 there were
also
 areas where i fell short: I delayed the workflow of others in our teams; I miss the developing targets. So i am mentioning some solutions for myself in next month to ensure that i hit the KPI next month: I will planning my time schedule more careful I will improve my technical skills to increase my working speed
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task achievement
Your email successfully addresses the main points: reasons for not meeting KPIs, achievements, failures, and solutions for the next month. However, it would benefit from clearer structure and organization, especially in separating different sections more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Consider using clear sections or paragraphs for each point to improve readability. A well-organized structure can help the reader follow your arguments more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your email ends with a conclusion or closing remark. This leaves a better impression and ensures your points are fully wrapped up.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the use of transitions between sentences and sections. Smooth transitions improve the flow of your message and make it easier to follow.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and explanations for why the issues led to the failure of your KPIs. This demonstrates a thorough analysis and understanding of the situation.
task achievement
The email addresses all the requested points clearly.
task achievement
Achievements and failures are recognized and listed clearly.
task achievement
The solutions for next month are practical and relevant.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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