The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph given illustrates data about how different
age
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groups used public
transport
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in one country in 2016.
Overall
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, the people who live in large
cities
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tend to use more public
transport
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, except elderly people who have the lowest proportion in the chart. Meanwhile, the other citizens in comparison to the larger
cities
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, the public
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used by them has the lowest proportion,
while
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the citizens who live in big
cities
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have the highest rankings. The people between the
age
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group 31- 45 who live in larger
cities
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,
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travel the most with public
transport
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having almost 70%, which puts them in the first place in the line graph,
also
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the
age
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group that lives in big
cities
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between 16-30 use over 50% of public
transport
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,
while
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the others ones only use over 20% of public
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. Both residents have their lowest proportion in the
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group between 61- 75.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, transport, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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