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You have just read an aticle in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your coinith all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter say which points in the article you agree with • explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres • offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in response
of
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 your article which you published in national newspaper"THE ARTICLE". I
am not agree
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 with your statement that all
town
center
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centers
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are looking
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look
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same
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the same
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 in my country.  It is not deniable that some of your points are correct. As you mentioned
that
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some buildings and streets are similar to one another
such
 as
library
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the library
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 facade and
market
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the market
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 around it. And each
town
center
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centre
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 has a round park in
middle
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the middle
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 of the intersection with the statue of freedom fighters of our country.
However
, I completely disagree with
explanation
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 of
same
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the same
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 building
of
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 each
town
. I believe that all buildings have different infrastructure and front
view
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views
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. Some towns are under development and some are well developed to explore everything in them. I want to invite you to our
town
 for
guided
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a guided
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 tour as I want to show you all
best
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the best
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 things in our locality.
Then
 you get to know all
differences
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the differences
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 of each
town
town
. Whenever you get time to explore our
town
 let me know,
I
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and I
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will help you with all
good
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the good
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 places to see. I hope
this
 letter helps you and see you soon. Yours sincerely, Jas
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task achievement
Ensure that you address all parts of the task in detail, giving concrete examples wherever possible.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and formal tone throughout the letter. Some sentences can be revised for clarity and formality.
coherence cohesion
Try to organize your letter more effectively by grouping similar ideas together and ensuring smooth transitions between them.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea and is developed sufficiently to support your overall argument.
coherence cohesion
You provided a polite greeting and closing, which are appropriate for a formal letter.
task achievement
You included specific points you agree with as well as those you disagree with, showing a balanced argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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