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The three pie charts present how much time each group of students spend in a British university library.

The three pie charts present how much time each group of students spend in a British university library.
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The three pie charts present how much time each group of
students
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 spend in a British university
library
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.
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 more than half of postgraduates use the
library
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 for more than 15 hours in comparison to
undergraduates
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,whose figures of that section
just
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are just
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 9 per cent.
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,in
case
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the case
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 of all
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students
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students,
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 most time in
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library
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the library
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spend
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is spent
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 just 15 per cent,which
much
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is much
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 closer to
proportion
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the proportion
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 of
undergraduates
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.Remarkably,postgraduates have
also
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obvious
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an obvious
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 difference in
number
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a number
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 of
students
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 who passed from 1 to 7 hours.Just 17 per cent against almost two out of three
of
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apply
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undergraduates
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 and exactly
one half
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 of all
students
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, no one team showed
considerable
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a considerable
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 gap in average spending from 8 to 14 hours.
One third
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 was visible everywhere,somewhere a little more or less. It is
cleat
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clear
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 from the data that postgraduates use the
library
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 most,
undergraduates
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 less and all
students
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 have a middle score.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, library, undergraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "present" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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