the maps below show the layout of a university's sports centre now,and how it will look after redevelopment. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature,and make comparision where relevant.

the maps below show the layout of a university's sports centre now,and how it will look after redevelopment.

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature,and make comparision where relevant.
The pictures depict the map of a university’s sports centre now, and how it is set to look after rebuilding.
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, it can be seen that the
sport
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centre is going to be bigger by expansion to the outdoor courts and it is planned to have
much
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more facilities. Looking at the details, the changing room, reception, seating and 25m pool will be the same in the future plan. One of the major changes will be the construction of a leisure pool
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the west side of the
sport
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club and another change will be the building of a sports hall near the seating. Looking at the east side, two dance studios are projected to be built and an extra changing room will be at the bottom of the studios. Another changing room will be on the
west south
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of the map. These new changing rooms are so necessary
due to
increasing
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number of
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centre’s
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members. The Gym on the top of the map will be erected in future
plan
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. Another striking change will be the introduction of a sports shop and
also
a café which help the members to enjoy their leisure time after finishing their workout.
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