In major cities around the world, traffic congestion has become a serious problem. How can this problem be tackled? Give reasons and examples from your own experience.
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the main issue and how to resolve it.
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creating
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and regulations to control the traffic
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people
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traffic
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part in reducing these harmful effects of traffic
congestion. The transporters must follow rules
diligently and be mindful of the regulations that the government
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, traffic
congestion and its harmful effects can be resolved with the support of the government
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples from your own experience or widely-known cases to support your points. This will make your arguments more compelling and concrete.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs by using clear transitions. This will make your essay easier to follow and more cohesive.
language
Work on your grammar and vocabulary to ensure that your ideas are expressed clearly and accurately. This includes paying attention to word choice and sentence structure.
task achievement
Expand your points further to give more depth to your response. Think about discussing the impact of traffic congestion on different aspects of urban life, such as health, economy, and environment.
coherence
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which provide a framework for your essay.
task
The essay touches upon various solutions from the perspective of both the government and individuals, showing a balanced approach.
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