In major cities around the world, traffic congestion has become a serious problem. How can this problem be tackled? Give reasons and examples from your own experience.

Congestion of
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traffic
is now causing
problem
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problems
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in several cities around the world
particularly
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in
the
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developed countries.
This
problem
has contributed
people
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the main issue and how to resolve it. In
this
matter, the
government
can help. They have a huge part in
ceating
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creating
rules
and regulations to control the
traffic
and improve its
infrastuctures
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infrastructure
infrastructures
. They are the main listener when it comes to issues
such
as
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public
highway
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. They
also
have the
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to provide
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its
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surveillance to
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the process for
a
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betterment of the
people
. If the
government
listens, it will really improve the
traffic
and possibly
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the
problem
. Several departments must coordinate with the
people
for them to have
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fast and smooth
traffic
. There must be
rules
such
as what or where they must go. There are
also
regulations that need to be conducted in order to have a limitation
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the number of vehicles driving each day.
This
solution can reduce problems that will alleviate the
problem
.
Likewise
,
people
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also
part in reducing these harmful effects of
traffic
congestion. The transporters must follow
rules
diligently and be mindful of the regulations that the
government
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.
To conclude
,
traffic
congestion and its harmful effects can be resolved with the support of the
government
as the main helping hand
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this
matter. Agencies
as well as
the
people
itself
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must cooperate and follow
rules
to have
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better transportation.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples from your own experience or widely-known cases to support your points. This will make your arguments more compelling and concrete.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs by using clear transitions. This will make your essay easier to follow and more cohesive.
language
Work on your grammar and vocabulary to ensure that your ideas are expressed clearly and accurately. This includes paying attention to word choice and sentence structure.
task achievement
Expand your points further to give more depth to your response. Think about discussing the impact of traffic congestion on different aspects of urban life, such as health, economy, and environment.
coherence
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which provide a framework for your essay.
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The essay touches upon various solutions from the perspective of both the government and individuals, showing a balanced approach.

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