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In major cities around the world, traffic congestion has become a serious problem. How can this problem be tackled? Give reasons and examples from your own experience.

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traffic
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 is now causing
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problem
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 in several cities around the world
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 in
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developed countries.
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 has contributed
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 the main issue and how to resolve it. In
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 can help. They have a huge part in
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creating
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 and regulations to control the
traffic
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 and improve its
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infrastructure
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public
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 to provide
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its
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surveillance to
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 the process for
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 betterment of the
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. If the
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 listens, it will really improve the
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 and possibly
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 the
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. Several departments must coordinate with the
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fast and smooth
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. There must be
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 the number of vehicles driving each day.
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 part in reducing these harmful effects of
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 congestion. The transporters must follow
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 diligently and be mindful of the regulations that the
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 congestion and its harmful effects can be resolved with the support of the
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 as the main helping hand
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 matter. Agencies
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itself
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 must cooperate and follow
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 to have
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better transportation.

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task achievement
Provide more specific examples from your own experience or widely-known cases to support your points. This will make your arguments more compelling and concrete.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs by using clear transitions. This will make your essay easier to follow and more cohesive.
language
Work on your grammar and vocabulary to ensure that your ideas are expressed clearly and accurately. This includes paying attention to word choice and sentence structure.
task achievement
Expand your points further to give more depth to your response. Think about discussing the impact of traffic congestion on different aspects of urban life, such as health, economy, and environment.
coherence
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which provide a framework for your essay.
task
The essay touches upon various solutions from the perspective of both the government and individuals, showing a balanced approach.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transportation system
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing apps
  • bicycle lanes
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • congestion pricing
  • peak hours
  • technological solutions
  • smart traffic lights
  • real-time traffic management
  • telecommuting
  • flexible working hours
  • daily commuters
  • road networks
  • rush hours
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