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The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart demonstrates the number of
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 that were won by different countries in 2012.
Overall
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, the nation that has won the most
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 among others is the USA.
By contrast
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, China has the fewest
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 for each type of award accomplished among the 12 countries.
Therefore
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, the United States of America has five times more first places than China. Regarding a medalist country, the United States of America won approximately 2300
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. Among those rewards,  nearly 1,000 were achieved.
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, there are just over 600 silver awards,
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 fewer than 600 bronze awards. As for China, the gold is the most
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 with just under 200 in the entire history.
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, the number of silver is nearly the same as that of gold, around 150. And the Asian territory has a little over 50 bronze badges.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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