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Some people think that we learn best through in-person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that
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 learning would become better through physical interactions with a tutor in a school environment. But others think e-learning
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 more effective.
This
 essay will discuss both the views where mode of learning would give a better quality of learning to the students. It may help in interacting with the teachers, but the most important thing is
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 it can clear any doubts easily especially in
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 any student whether they are new to subjects or having any difficulties which they don’t understand a topic on-site interaction can be beneficial to get feedback as well
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 a chance to interact with other peers
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 it has become
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 mode of learning where
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physical teachings
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 improved when it comes
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 who are joining a difficult course. In my
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 I would agree that
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, though interacting would be great in a particular place,
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with the help of
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 growth of technology individuals now can connect in various parts of
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. By not just limiting one’s
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 it is now possible where youth can explore and interact with other cultures where they can learn and share any information in an instant.
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, there were several challenges where many people did not have any access and the lifestyle has completely changed the way of learning things.
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, in India majority of teaching staff did not have any technical knowledge which
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impacted
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teaching quality. I
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believe that though e-learning
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 beneficial and easiest
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with lack of any infrastructure
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could hamper the learning process at some point. In conclusion, physical learning can make students understand
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it helps to interact with peers and tutors in classroom
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 better but
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 of technological infrastructure should be considered to improve.
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task achievement
Ensure to elaborate on each point with more specific examples. This helps in providing stronger support for your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and flow of ideas. For instance, some sentences are missing proper punctuation or have awkward phrasing.
task achievement
The introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines the main points to be discussed.
coherence cohesion
The essay contains a logical structure with distinct paragraphs for each viewpoint and a conclusion that summarizes the overall argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immediate feedback
  • retention of information
  • sense of community
  • social and communication skills
  • controlled learning environment
  • flexibility in scheduling
  • online resources and tools
  • cater to different learning styles
  • learn at their own pace
  • complex subjects
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