IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The chart below shows the value of one country's export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summrarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summrarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar
chart
Use synonyms
 provides information about exports in different methods of one country in the years 2015 and 2016. The table
chart
Use synonyms
 illustrates the proportion of change in values after a 1-year period.
Overall
Linking Words
, in the first
chart
Use synonyms
, the highest
petroleum
Use synonyms
products
Use synonyms
,
while
Linking Words
 the smallest
textiles
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, in the second
chart
Use synonyms
, the biggest percentage of
textiles
Use synonyms
, compared to the lowest percentage of agricultural
products
Use synonyms
. In terms of 2015 export earnings the highest made up of
petroleum
Use synonyms
products
Use synonyms
 and engineered goods around 60,
while
Linking Words
 gems and jewellery comprised about just over a third
in contrast
Linking Words
, agricultural
products
Use synonyms
 and
textiles
Use synonyms
 fell by 25 billion, and in 2016
petroleum
Use synonyms
products
Use synonyms
 and engineered goods fell by 57 billion, compared to gems and jewellery unchanging. Agricultural
products
Use synonyms
 and
textiles
Use synonyms
 made up 30 billion after a 1-year period. Respectively, the percentage change in values between 2015 and 2016 was the highest;
textiles
Use synonyms
 comprised 15.24%,
while
Linking Words
 agricultural
products
Use synonyms
 made up 0,81%, compared to gems and jewellery at 5.18%. The proportion of engineered goods and
petroleum
Use synonyms
products
Use synonyms
 is around 5%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, petroleum, products, textiles with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: