The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the age
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old hired in different areas between 1970 and 2000.
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, there was an upward trend in the figure of females who were hired for occupations in all given countries, whereas
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were respectively 52%, 78%, 62% and 74%. Correct word choice
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