The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the utilization of fish and other different sorts of meat in countries from Europe spanning from 1979 to 2004. As the line graph indicates,
majority
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the majority
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types
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of types
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of meat showcased a downward trend,
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some had a steady fluctuation and witnessed a moderate rise. Regarding
the
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beef and lamb
consumption
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, both of them had the same
downward sloping
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throughout the designated timeline. First of all,
consumption
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of beef began at just above 200
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,
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“lamb” started at exactly 150
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per person per week. Between 1979 and 1984,
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beef usage increased considerably before showcasing a steady remain in the following year.
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, from just under 250
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in
1984
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1984,
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it experienced a steady fall until it reached its lowest point at around 100
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in 2004. Lamb
consumption
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also
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faced some fluctuations throughout the period.
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, as
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meat
consumption
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also
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had a constant decrease
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50
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in 2004.
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, despite the fact that
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chicken
consumption
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began
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the same point as lamb utilization, it increased slightly in 1979.
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, in the following year, it experienced a sharp increase after decreasing slightly from
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approximately 150
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.
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,
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chicken expenditure rose steadily for the rest of the period,
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, fish usage was stable.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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