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On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter Describe the item you lost Explain how you lost it Tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

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Dear Sir/ Mme, I am Rabeb, client to your
insurance
 company for 3
month
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. My
insurance
 travel
begin
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begins
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at
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on
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 2nd March 2024. I am writing
this
 letter to inform your company that I lost my
suitcase
in
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on
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 my
last
 holiday. I present the details in
this
 letter.
Firstly
, my
suitcase
 was a small bag. The label
of
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PARIS is
writ
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written
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at
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on
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 the front of my
suitcase
. In
this
suitcase
, I had my clothes and my IPAD. My clothes are a
pant
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pants
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,
T-shirt
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a T-shirt
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 and
underwears
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underwear
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.
Secondly
, I lost my
suitcase
in
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on
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 the
airplane
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aeroplane
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 when I arrived
in
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at
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 the airport
of
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in
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 my hometown. Indeed, the hostess mentioned
to be
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being
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 quick and
to leave
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leaving
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 the
airplane
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aeroplane
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. I go out quick and I don't remember to take my
suitcase
 with me.
Finally
, I would gratefully, Sir/ Mme
to
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return the total cost of my
suitcase
 because I have travel
insurance
 to cover the cost of anything lost.
This
 cost is about 2000$ including
price
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the price
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 of
suitcase
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the suitcase
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, clothes and
IPAD
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the IPAD
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. The reference number of my travel
insurance
 is 123456789. Yours faithfully Rabeb
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Ensure grammatical accuracy to enhance clarity, such as using proper tenses and articles.
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Expand on how losing the suitcase affected your holiday to provide more context.
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Maintain consistency in the formal tone throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical flow by using more transitional phrases to connect ideas.
coherence cohesion
Group similar ideas together into cohesive paragraphs for better readability.
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Clear description of the lost item helps in understanding the situation.
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Respectful and polite tone suits the formal nature of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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