The graph below shows the percentage of households with diferent kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information bselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words
The graph shows the proportion of five different
kind
of technical Change to a plural noun
kinds
product
Fix the agreement mistake
products
during
1995 to 1999. The Change preposition
from
precentages
of these five electronic Correct your spelling
percentages
percentage
product
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
increase
year by year. As we can see from the diagram Replace the word
increased
that
washing Correct word choice
apply
machine
Fix the agreement mistake
machines
has
always been Correct subject-verb agreement
have
on
the top electronic Change preposition
apply
product
. Followed by Fix the agreement mistake
products
computer
in the second place. Internet usage gradually Correct article usage
the computer
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
reached
Correct word choice
and reached
maximum
Add an article
a maximum
the maximum
at
50% within the Change preposition
of
four year
period. Add a hyphen
four-year
While
dvd
player decreased Correct your spelling
DVD
of
all the technologies Change preposition
apply
product
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words product with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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