The graph below shows the percentage of households with diferent kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information bselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words

The graph below shows the percentage of households with diferent kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information bselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words
The graph shows the proportion of five different
kind
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kinds
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of technical
product
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products
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during
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from
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1995 to 1999. The
precentages
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percentages
percentage
of these five electronic
product
were
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increase
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increased
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year by year. As we can see from the diagram
that
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washing
machine
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machines
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has
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have
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always been
on
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apply
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the top electronic
product
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products
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. Followed by
computer
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the computer
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in the second place. Internet usage gradually
increase
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increased
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reached
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and reached
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maximum
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a maximum
the maximum
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at
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of
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50% within the
four year
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four-year
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period.
While
dvd
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DVD
player decreased
of
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apply
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all the technologies
product
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words product with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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