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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Employment rates, education and averange anuual income, 2015: Country, Employment rate, Average income

The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Employment rates, education and averange anuual income, 2015: Country, Employment rate, Average income
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The table
has showed
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shows
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 how many people in each named
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countries
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country
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 are employed,
had
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have
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education
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, and their average
income
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. These
countries
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 mainly the
european
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European
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countries
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 were asked for
a
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data in the year 2015.
Overall
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, in 2015,
Norway
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 was recorded as the country
who
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that
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 had the highest rate
in
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of
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 both
employment
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 and
education
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that
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resulted
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resulting
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being
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in being
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 the
highest
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country with the highest
income
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. Greece has the lowest percentage of
employment
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while
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 Portugal has the least people who
had
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accessed
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 to
education
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.
Countries
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 who had reached above half of the average
income
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 are Austria, Luxembourg,
Norway
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 and the UK. In the details, when it comes to
employment
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, Greece has the only and the least among
countries
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 who
has
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 around 50% but not recorded as the least in accessing
education
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. Despite the increased number of
employment
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 in Portugal, they are the lowest in the
education
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 population.
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, the country of
Norway
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 was consistent in every population rate
that
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which
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 can be evidently observed in the average
income
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.
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the
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Norway
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, the
countries
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 of Luxembourg, Austria, the UK, and
Norway
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 paved their way in gaining
as
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apply
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one of the most
income
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 in Europe.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, education, income, norway, employment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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