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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Marital Status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Marital Status of the populations of Canada and Australia.
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The two pie diagrams represent the stages of
marriage
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the marriage
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 of the Canadian
as well as
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Australian
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the Australian
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population
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Furthermore
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, it gives information regarding the number of individuals in each category.
Overall
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 ,
although
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 the majority of the
population
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 in both nations are officially married, more than half the
people
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 in Canada are living separately but are not divorced ,
whereas
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 in Australia more are in marriage. Canada has a small group of
people
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 in same-sex relations. In Canada, nearly double
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that of the married
population
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 are living separately, where 29% of
people
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 are married . either of one partner lost candidates and those who never marry are the same at 7% . Only 1% is divorced . 3% are in same-sex marriage In Australia, around 46% of the
population
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 remain married and fairly close to that 41% are living separately but not divorced . 1% of more
people
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 in Australia are widowed than single .5% are single . divorced
people
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 are only 2%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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