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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph illustrates the rate of Australian business exports for 22
years
 with four different nations. In general,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of exports to Japan and
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the US
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 decreased towards the end of the timeline.
In contrast
, China and India experienced an
increased
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 towards the end. Regarding China,
export
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the export
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 rate stood at around 4% in 1990 and it gradually rose to 5% in 2000.
Then
 there was a dramatic increase in
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export
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exports
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 at around 28% in 2012 which is the highest comparing other nations. In terms of India,
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the proportion
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 of exports remained
steadily
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 between 1990 and 2000. From 2000 to 2010, it gradually rose from 4% to about 7% before it fell to 5% in 2012. Turning to Japan, it experienced a steady decrease over the 22
years
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 from around 26% to just over 15%. In
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 of
US
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, it fluctuated first 10
years
 and
then
 there was a gradual
fell
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 from 11% to 5% next 10
years
. Interestingly, there was a slight rise from 2010 to 2012 from 5% to 6%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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