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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the world wholesale of different types of
games
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 in billions of
dollars
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 from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that handheld
games
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 have the most
sales
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.
Additionally
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, online
games
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 and mobile phone
games
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 increased their
sales
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 every
year
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,
while
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 console game
sales
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 decreased. In 2000, Handheld
games
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 were in first place in
sales
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 at just under 12
billion
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dollars
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 and it increased every
year
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 and reached approximately 15
billion
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dollars
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 in the years 2004 and 2005.
This
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 aspect took the peak point at about 18
billion
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 in 2006.
However
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, console
games
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 were at 6
billion
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dollars
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 in
sales
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 in 2000 , following that, fell slightly every
year
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 and stayed at around 4
billion
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dollars
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 in 2003 and 2004. But it continued to decline and reached the minimum point in 2006 at roughly 3
billion
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dollars
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.
Moreover
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, online
games
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 and cellphone
games
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 were not in the
year
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 2000
this
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 appeared in the
year
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 2001 at just under 1
billion
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 and in 2002 at just above 1
billion
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dollars
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, respectively.
Finally
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, their highest point at 2006 at approximately 8
billion
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dollars
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words games, dollars, sales, year, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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