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The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.

The table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Australia during the period 2011-12.
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The table compares data about male and female involvement in the selection of
activities
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 in Australia in 2011 and 2012.
Overall
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, there are some unnoticeable differences in the proportion of male and female involvement in the selected
activities
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, where males were less likely than females to take part in sporting
activities
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. The most popular activity for both genders was walking for exercise, where the
percentage
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 of
women
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 was twice
more
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than
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men
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.
By contrast
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, yoga was the least popular activity
overall
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. Just around 3% of
women
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 did yoga,
while
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 no
men
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.
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 Netball saw a similar
percentage
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 of genders. The kinds of
activities
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 where
women
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 are less liked than
men
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 are golf,football and basketball.A
percentage
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 of
men
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 around 2,8% and 4,8% played basketball and football,
while
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 no
women
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 played.
However
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, the
percentage
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 of
men
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 who played gold was 8,2%. A smaller
percentage
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 of males than females went swimming or diving,
although
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 fitness and gym are more popular for
women
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instead
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 of
men
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, percentage, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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