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The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows how much full, low-fat
milk
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 and butter was consumed by four different
age
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 groups in a country in Europe every week.
Overall
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, there was an increase in
milk
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 consumption across 4
age
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 groups, with old
people
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 under 65 witnessing the highest figure, mainly for low-fat.
However
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, the most butter was used by
people
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 from 45-65 years old,
while
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 the least was for the below 25
age
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 group. Regarding
milk
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, the amount of
milk
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 for individuals under 25 was the lowest at 1200ml, compared to 26-45 (1650ml), 45-65 (1670ml), and over 65 (1900ml). The
people
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 between 26 and 45 have the highest low-fat percentage (80%) but consumed the least
full-fat
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milk
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(20%) in the examined sectors. The opposite can be seen in the figure for under 25 accounting for 59% (
full-fat
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) and 41% (low fat). The fat content for groups 45-65, and below 65 was 45%, 30%
full-fat
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, and 55%, 70% low-fat respectively. For butter, the 45-65
age
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 group usage was 12g, followed by the figures of under 25(12g), 26-45 (19g), and over 65 (30g). The
people
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 26-45 consumed the most
full-fat
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 (62%),
while
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 that of under 25 was the lowest. Interestingly, the above 45
age
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 group used the nearly same proportion of low-fat (51%) and
full-fat
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 (50%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, age, people, ml, full-fat, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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