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The plans show Ashford in 2010 and Ashford now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans illustrate
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Ashford
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Ashford's
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develompents
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developments
development
 between 2010 and now.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 housing
area
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areas
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 have been developed over the
enitre
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entire
 period,
while
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 park
area
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areas
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 unchanged. There is a new bridge
has
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apply
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constructed over the River Tam, and has removed
ferry
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the ferry
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 and built a yacht marina in the same place. In 2010 , the housing area
is
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located in the northeast of
Ashford
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 was limited , but in the present , it has increased
two
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 more houses,
moreover
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, there are built new apartments next to the river.
However
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, trees were situated in the northeast corner of
Ashford
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 unchanged,
also
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 the main road remained the same on the
northweast
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northwest
northeast
 side. In the present,it has been replaced ferry by
bridge
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a bridge
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 over the river to connect both sides of
Ashford
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. a main road is extended to the south, next to
new
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the new
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 yacht marina.
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also
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also,
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 they have
been
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apply
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added trees in the
southweast
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southwest
south-east
 of
Ashford
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task achievement
The essay needs to provide more detailed specifics about the changes that have taken place. Additionally, be wary of grammatical errors and strive for clearer sentence structure.
task achievement
Ensure that all paragraphs clearly support the main points with specific examples. This improves the essay's clarity and impact.
coherence cohesion
Work on using more varied cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas smoothly. This can make your essay easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Review the use of tenses; they should reflect the timing of the changes accurately. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper use of articles to improve grammatical accuracy.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear overview of the main changes that occurred from 2010 to now.
coherence cohesion
There is a logical structure maintained, with the essay divided into paragraphs that describe different aspects of the changes.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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