The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Given is a bar chart illustrating the manufacture and
consumption
of electricity in ten nations in 2014.
Overall
, it is apparent from
information
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the information
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supplied that the rate of
production
energy
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of energy
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dominated
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is dominated
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than
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by
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consumption
in all countries, except Germany.
Firstly
, as is presented in a graph, China (
production
5,398
billion
kWh
,
consumption
5,322
billion
kWh
) and the United States (
production
4,099
billion
kWh
, 3,866
billion
consumption
) both had a much higher performance than the other eight republics. In third place, in
energy producing
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energy-producing
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rank is Russia with equal
production
1,057
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of 1,057
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billion
kWh
and
consumption
1,038
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billion
kWh
numbers. Meanwhile, 936,2 and 856,7
kWh
showed Japan in the illustration.
Also
, India - the fifth top state with 871
kWh
of power producing and 698,8 of used kilowatt.
Secondly
, as a pictorial suggests 618,9 and 499,9
kWh
presented Canada in 2014. The seventh civilization - France had 561,2
kWh
production
,
462,9
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and 462,9
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of making
energy
. Brazil
had
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was
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a little behind
from
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apply
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France in
production
(530,7 of dynamism, 455,8 in using hydro). Before the
last
one
is
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in
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Germany which had differences
that
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from
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others
,
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when producing
energy
was 526,6
kWh
, expending of that was 582,5
kWh
. The
last
one is
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the Korea
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Korea
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Korean
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Republic 485,1
kWh
in
production
and 449,5 in
consumption
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, production, energy, billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.

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  • survey results
  • popularity
  • leisure activities
  • European adults
  • significant rise
  • steady
  • collectively
  • slight increase
  • emerged
  • accounting for
  • percentage of people
  • new leisure activity
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