The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the average income earned by five occupations, which are Police, Nurse, Teacher, Firefighter and Underground Driver, and by two working period groups of starting and after three years. The table illustrates the weekly average working
hours
for the five occupations mentioned above.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there is no significant growth between working started and working over three years
amount
all five careers. And both teachers and firefighters see the most
hours
of working over a week.
According to
the bar chart, we
can
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know that underground drivers have the highest salary whether when they just started work or after three years with the
amount
of around 50000, and nurses earn the least with
amount
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approximately
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18000. The second
amount
of salary belonged to firefighters, about 40000 per year, followed by teachers and police with amounts around 30000 and 20000 respectively. When it comes to working
hours
, underground drivers see the least one per week, which means
this
group earn the most money with the least working
hours
.
Besides
, nursing and police are mostly reaching the average working
hours
, around 40 per week.
In addition
, teachers and firefighters have the most working loads with 55
hours
weekly, which is dramatically over the average working
hours
.
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