Some people today believe that the world’s increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that a world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society.
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
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whether
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unsustainable or beneficial.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure every paragraph has a clear main idea and use linking words to enhance coherence, such as 'Furthermore,' 'Moreover,' and 'Therefore.' This will help in maintaining a logical flow throughout your essay.
task achievement
Provide specific examples or data to support your arguments. For instance, mention specific countries or statistical data to make your argument more compelling and credible.
task achievement
Your essay presents clear sides of the debate – those who believe population increase is detrimental and those who find it beneficial.
coherence cohesion
You have an evident structure with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing both viewpoints, and a conclusion with your opinion.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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