Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Why is this case? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities.

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road-related problems are becoming one of the most common and global issues. Loads of states all over the world are scrambling to figure out how to solve it.
However
,these days mankind found ways how to do it and make
traffic
issues easier. One of the main aspects of the problem is that roads are crowded with a big among of cars,especially in the metropolises.Sometimes
traffic
jams
last
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hours
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can cause only little problems for tardy employees,but some
jams
may
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several days and even weeks,
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we usually can see
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Tokyo’s roads.One of the main
reason
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behind
that is
stoplights,
that
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make cars stop,and stops of cars
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a
reason
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road congestion.
This
could lead to
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of time,especially if it roadblock in Tokyo that lasts at least 5 days.
Moreover
,it may be a cause of conflicts
on
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the
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traffic
,and some conflicts may become
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fight
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,and fights always lead to bad results. To tackle
this
problem government should reduce
amount
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of
traffic
lights on the road.As I said before,the main
reason
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traffic
jams
is
stoplight
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stoplights
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,which
amount is
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so many you can meet them
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every 2 minutes and does not matter in what town you are
,it
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could be
small
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a small
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countryside or
large
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megalopolis.
This
may be the easiest and the best way to solve road problems without any
affects
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to
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drivers and
government
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the government
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. Having weighed everything mentioned
up
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, we can come to
a
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conclusion that stoplights - the main
reason
of
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for
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jams
and their reduction will make some
governments
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government's
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life
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lives
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easier.
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task achievement
You should expand your essay to provide a more comprehensive response. Discuss more reasons behind traffic congestion beyond traffic lights alone. Mention other factors such as public transportation inefficiency, urban sprawl, and increasing car ownership. This will help to strengthen your task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Structure your essay better by organizing it into clear paragraphs: an introduction, body paragraphs each addressing a specific reason or solution, and a conclusion. This will improve the coherence and cohesion of your argument.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction sets the stage for discussing the issue of traffic congestion well.
introduction conclusion present
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main point on the issue of stoplights causing traffic jams.

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