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The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 present information about
calorie
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calories
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 in the United States respectively in
while
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 period. Altogether there are five categories,
Overall
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,
figure's
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figures
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display the
salary
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 of each employee of
of
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apply
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hours per
weekly
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week
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. Generally speaking,
according to
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 the table there's
highest
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the highest
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inrease
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increase
on
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in
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underground
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the underground
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driver
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drivers
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,
while
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nurse
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nursing
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 the lowest in the graph,
in
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addition
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addition,
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 the two areas
teacher
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of teacher
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 and firefighter
similarity
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 between the
the
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apply
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average. As
cleraly
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clearly
see
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seen
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, as is observed
in
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at
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 the beginning of the
salary
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, the
figurs
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figures
figure
 mentioned the underground after three years gradually
increase
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increased
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approximately
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by approximately
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 about 2000.
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However
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 the
tow
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two
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 aspects on the police become slightly change in the
salary
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.
Despite
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,
in contrast
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,
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there was a significant increase in the
salary
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 of
nursing
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nurses
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 in the tow period, in the case the
avrage
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average
 working it's 38
while
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 the week. in
compariosn
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comparison
comparisons
 between the teacher and
firefighter
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firefighters
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, the
salaary
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salary
 dramatically slightly
increase
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increases
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, for
instane
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instance
 the same as working hours by 55.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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