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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given maps depict information about the modernization of the
Ryemouth's
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Ryemouth
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 village between 1995 and the present time. At first glance, it is undeniable that there are several changes over time, except for
cafe
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the cafe
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. Notably, the most visible difference between now and the past illustrated on the map is the fishing port,
it
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which
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 has
been
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disappeared. Regarding the northern part, there is a golf course that used to be
a
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farmland
is
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and is
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 linked to the nearby tennis courts. In 1995, the forest park was a large area but was cut to build the two mentioned tennis courts aiming to
serving
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serve
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 residents in housing. At present, the
road
 system has been expanded to support people
live
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living
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 conveniently in
another new houses
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another new house
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that is
 established.
Furthermore
, people build more houses
in
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on
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 the northwest side of the map.
On the other hand
, in the south, apartments which
is
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are
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 adjacent to the cafe have been built at the expense of
fish
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the fish
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 market. Above, it was a shop that indeed close to the
road
also
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and also
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transform
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transformed
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 into a restaurant to serve customers who live in the hotel located at the corner of the
road
. Interestingly, the hotel
have
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 not
innovate
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 anything, but to build a car park between the
road
 and the hotel.
Finally
, the cafe has stabilized since 1995.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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