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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred
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Nowadays, there are distinct sources of
energy
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 between renewable
energy
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, clean
energy
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 and other types of
energy
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. The presented pies demonstrate the prime source of power in the USA in the disparate periods in 1980 and 1990.
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,
oil
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 was the most source of power utilised in the two periods, albeit the
oil
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 percentage marked a fall in 1990.
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 with. the coal proportion increased slightly from 22% to 27% by 5%.
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,
oil
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 percentage doubled from 5% to 10%.
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, the natural gas proportion dipped by 1% to 25% and it is a quarter of the total used
energy
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 in 1990.
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, the usage rate of
oil
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 plummeted from 42% to 33%,
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, the hydroelectric power ratio remained static.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sources of energy
  • predominant
  • renewables
  • nuclear
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • trends
  • overall
  • preference
  • shifts
  • implications
  • future energy landscape
  • decades
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